Well Done
For a first effort I think this came out really well. Personally I think it may be better suited as a loop than a song - that is to say you remove the pause at the end and tweak it to just keep the thing moving full circle. The distortion part at around 1:15 may need to be tweaked a bit as well, since it seems just slightly out of place with the feel of the song at that point. Beyond that it sounds just fine to me, I could easily see it in some cyberpunk game or anime towards the beginning of the adventure. :)